Minggu, 22 Maret 2015
Hello
everyone.. My name is Dian Permana Istiqomah, my friends call me Diun.
Talk about
dreams.. When I was child, I dont know about dreams I just said what in my eyes
look great like to be doctor, model, singer and etc, but now I have dreams, it
just a simple dream but I think its not easy to reach. Yaa.. I want to be a
young lecturer and have my own business.
Why I want
to be a young lecturer? Because I want to share my knowledge and my experience
with my student without distance between us, so when they ask something to me
they feel comfort and we can discuss it.
My second
dream is I want to have my own business. I think its fun to be a leader and
have staff.
What I will
do to making my dreams come true is I have to finish my study in University
with good score so I can continue my study
in Double degree then I have to get many experience , so I can share it
in the future with all people J
When someone
ask me what I prefer being businessman or public civil servant , I will answer
that I prefer to be public civil servant. Because I think its not easy to be
Businessman so I have to start it from lower like being public civil servant, increase
income then get many experience. Next when I have capital to start business, I
will do.
Thanks Diun for posting :)
BalasHapuslook, your sentence on "it just a simple dream but I think its not easy to reach"...please remember that you need the Verb "Be" after subject.....can you make it better?
thanks mam for the correction . I will make it better
Hapusi hope your dreams come true diun, let's reach together :)
BalasHapusWhat business you want to run, Diun ?
BalasHapusHi Diun
BalasHapusI hope your dreams come true. Don't forget to pray and keep trying Diun :)
I hope your dreams come true Diun. Keep the spirit to reach your dreams....:)
BalasHapusHi Diun, I just wanna give you some suggestions.
BalasHapusI think your sentences will be good if you use full stop in the end of sentence "... I dont know about dreams." and in the end of sentence "...doctor, model, singer and etc."
I suggest that, because I feel confused when I read that sentences without full stop.
Are you sure with sentence "Talk about dreams" ? I think you should better use "Talking about deams".
BalasHapusI think ".. to be doctor...", "..to be public civil servant.." is incorrect. The correct is ".. to be a doctor..", "to be a public civil servant.."
"to making my dreams come true" it is incorrect. (to+V1), So the correct is "to make my dreams come true"
BalasHapus"Next when I have capital to start business, I will do"... What activity in sentence I will do ?
The sentence should better if "Next when I have capital to start business, I will do it."
"I dont know about dreams" it is incorrect. The correct is "I didn't know about dreams" :)
"model, singer and etc" before word "and" you should better use comma (,).
BalasHapus"many experience , so I can share it.." I think it is incorrect, after word "experience" without space.
"public civil servant , I will answer.." after word "servant" the correct without space.
I think words "to be Businessman" is incorrect. The correct is there are "a" before word "businessman" ...
Please correction the punctuation. In my opinion in one paragraph there are minimum 3 sentences.
I hope you can make your dreams come true.. Fighting :)
Diun, I think that you can be a model because you're beautiful and tall :)
BalasHapusFighting! Fighting!
Diunaaa, keep fighting with your dream :D I hope you can reach your dreams. I agree with Ifa that you are talented to be a model.
BalasHapus