Minggu, 22 Maret 2015
Hello….
My name is Chintiya Febiana Ramadhani, you can call me Chintiya. In this moment I want to tell you about my dreams. My dreams are make my parents proud of me; have my own business; graduate in 3.5 years, after that I want to get accounting profession degree and I have to study again for a year. After complete my study I want to work in the civil servant, I want to be an accountant and work as civil servant.
If I must to choose between a business or work as public civil servants so I choose both of them, because I want to work as public civil servants and besides that I also want to have my own business. I want to work in the finance ministry. Beside I work as civil servant I want to make my own business. My dream business are have a restaurant and online shop. I think having own business it’s something that is very pleasant.
I will study harder, prayer, never give up, and asking for prayers from my parents to make my dreams come true.
I think that’s all that I can tell you about my dreams and thank you miss.
Chintiya, may your dream come true. Thank you for sharing. Please check again your writing...ask your friends to help you.
BalasHapus"My dreams are make my parents proud of me"... before "make", you need to put "to"...
amiiinn. your welcome miss.
Hapusthank you miss uut for your correction, I will check my writing :)
I agree with your plan to have a restaurent business, because every day peoples need some foods to eat, so I think, your business is profitable. fighting chintiya !!
BalasHapusthank you mendi :)
HapusSimple dreams, but you have hard work to reach your dreams. ;D
BalasHapusStay focus on your dreams :)
Chintya Fighting!
BalasHapusI hope your dream come true :)
Let's work hard, always pray to Allah and never Give up. Let's make our parents proud of us. :)
amiiiin. thanks aliffa :)
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BalasHapusChintiya, I have read your post. I think there are some mistakes in terms of punctuation.
BalasHapus1. "After complete my study I want to work in the civil servant, I want to be an accountant and work as civil servant." In my opinion you should add comma (,) after study and after servant you should add point (.).
2. "If I must to choose between a business or work as public civil servants so I choose both of them, because I want to work as public civil servants and besides that I also.." You should add comma (,) after servant (without s) and then change comma (,) after them with point (.).
3. "Beside I work as civil servant I want to make my own business." You should add comma (,) after servant.
Okay, that is slight correction from me. I hope it can help you, Chintiya.
okay. thank you desi for your correction, I will check my writing :)
Hapusi hope your dream come true, chintiya :-) keep spirit !!!
BalasHapusamiiiin. thank you anisa :)
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BalasHapusHi Chintiya ..
BalasHapus"..work as civil servant" you should add "a" before "civil servant". The correct is "..a civil servant"
"..I choose both of them.." I think it is simple future (S+will+V1). The correct is ".. I will choose both of them .."
Are you sure "I think having own business" ? you should write "I think that having my own business"
".. is very pleasant" you should write "..is a pleasant thing" .
"and asking for prayers" not use V-ing but use V1 "and ask for prayers" .
"public civil servants", servants is not add -s, so the correct is"public civil servant".
You must consistent when you make sentence. You use a civil servant or a public civil servant.
You dreams is good. I hope you can make your dreams come true.
BalasHapusFighting Chintiya.. :)
amiiiin.
Hapusthank you for your correction:)
What a good dreams Chintiya :D Keep your spirit till you reach your dreams :D
BalasHapus